Band 6 vs Band 7 Task Response Differences in IELTS Writing Key Modifications Explained
Understanding distinctions between Band 6 and Band 7 responses is critical for IELTS score improvement. Below demonstrates structural and linguistic refinements through a sample question:
Task
Write a letter to airport authorities about a lost bag during domestic travel, covering:
– Purpose of writing
– Circumstances of loss
– Requested action
Band 6 Student Response Analysis
Original Content:
Dear Sir,
…I took flight 464 from Banglore to delhi…kept bags in cabin…reached at 1 o’clock…forget suitcase…black VIP bag…contains files, pen, clothes…send to address…
Key Improvement Areas for Band 7:
1. Error Correction
– Fix spelling/capitalization: Bangalore, Delhi
– Grammar: “forgot” instead of “forget”
– Punctuation: Add commas after introductory clauses
2. Precision & Cohesion
– Replace vague phrases (“put in cabin”) → “stored under seat 12B”
– Eliminate redundant details (“frequent flyer” statement)
– Use cohesive devices: “Consequently,” “Moreover”
3. Lexical Enhancement
– Substitute basic terms: exhausted instead of tired; unintentionally rather than forgot
– Specific descriptors: navy-blue folder vs. blue files
4. Structural Optimization
– Consolidate descriptions: “A VIP-branded 4-wheel black trolley containing…”
– Remove postal address to adhere to word limits
Upgraded Band 7 Version
Dear Airport Manager,
I am writing to report the misplacement of my suitcase during flight 464 from Bangalore to Delhi on June 15.
I boarded the 10 PM service storing one laptop bag and a suitcase (Tag #DL456) beneath seat 12B. Due to an unexpected 3-hour delay, we arrived in Delhi at 1 AM. Exhausted from work commitments, I unintentionally left the suitcase onboard while collecting my laptop bag.
The missing item is a black VIP hardcase trolley (2023 model) featuring silver trim. Contents include:
– Two navy-blue project folders
– Emerald-green client manuals
– A leather-bound planner & gold Parker pen
– Assorted casual attire
Kindly notify me immediately via 9876XXXXXX upon recovery. I can collect it personally from your baggage claim office.
Your prompt assistance is appreciated.
Yours sincerely,
Rajesh Verma
(172 words)
Core Takeaways:
– Band 7 demands error-free mechanics + sophisticated cohesion
– Contextual precision outweighs generic descriptions
– Concise formatting enhances readability within constraints
